Pathway to Heaven (39)
1
A fiery rose begins to glow
During the break of day
Allowing a pale chariot
To quietly head away
Hope is a part of any dawn
That ushers out the night
Inviting faith and charity
To reach out and unite
The changing skies of day reveal
Life’s cycle moving like a wheel
From dawn to dusk, then night
While sparkling in the skies above
A sanctuary of peace and love
For those that see the light
2
The day turns over a new leaf
With chores to undertake
Assisted by the rising sun
Light work for God to make
And even in the winter time
For lands covered with snow
How good to see communities
So peaceful and aglow
The changing skies of day reveal
Life’s cycle moving like a wheel
From dawn to dusk, then night
While sparkling in the skies above
A sanctuary of peace and love
For those that see the light
3
The ruby sky of dusk arrives
With grandiose like the dawn
As a red rose about to close
Trades places with a thorn
A silken veil is ready now
To shade the world below
An invitation to the stars
To open their sideshow
The changing skies of day reveal
Life’s cycle moving like a wheel
From dawn to dusk, then night
While sparkling in the skies above
A sanctuary of peace and love
For those that see the light
4
The evening sky becomes the night
How strange and dark it seems
However, sleep is not without
Its own amazing dreams
Aurora dancing in the sky
Once called the Milky Way
As stargazers delight to see
The ending of the day
The changing skies of day reveal
Life’s cycle moving like a wheel
From dawn to dusk, then night
While sparkling in the skies above
A sanctuary of peace and love
For those that see the light
When earthly cares are put aside
To celebrate the lovely bride
Arriving soon at dawn
What better than a blooming rose
To open up the day for those
Yearning to be reborn
The End
© Frankie Espirit
I have changed the chorus to remain within the theme set by the verses dealing with the changes and cycles in a singly day. The former chorus focused on the changes and cycles in a single year. Strictly speaking a chorus is to reinforce what has already been established in the verses and not for adding a new dimension as previously was the case. I am happy with the new chorus which as a matter of interest borrows some of the language employed in the original chorus line.
ReplyDeleteAnother few but small changes plus a return to a former line from a previously revised line. Neither are perfect yet both are not that far away with my preference for former line on reflection. Aiming for perfection is good, but you can actually try too hard. It has often been said that the sonnets of Shakespeare were over written in search of perfection and that The Ancient Mariner by Samuel Coleridge is a more satisfying poem not least because it was not over-written and as a consequence has the vitality that is lacking in the sonnets of Shakespeare.
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